Everlasting Lies

I haven't written a story for here for a long time. Constant bickering COUGHCOUGHCOOKIECOUGHCOUGH and this reading story I have to write is making me post something here. My last story seemed like a hit, so I will try to do it again.

My themes have changed so here it is. Everlasting lies. (Tis only a preview)


I have to leave now.
It’s not safe for me here.
If I stay, I will die.
And dying doesn’t seem like an option for me today.
Keeping secrets can be hard.
Especially when you didn’t intend to know them.
One mistake,
Falling dominoes.
Everlasting lies,
Shortcoming truth.
Today is the day that the Lord has made,
Today is the day that the devil will take.
Let us rejoice and be glad in it.

Sounds bada**. When are you gonnna write it?

LMAO
COUGHCOUGHCOOKIECOUGHCOUGH

Anyways, sounds good! But you can't steal my LAWYER FANS! MWAHAHAHAHAHA

TIS A CHALLENGE COOKIE! TIS IT IS!

And I haven't decided when I will continue...

It was good until it turned into a gospel hymn at the end. o.o

I thought that part made it more epic,SG. lol.

You can see that the person curses a lot of rambles in their head.
Tell me what I have to work on for the next chapter and what you think is the real plot of this story.

Thank you

the plot might be something about man being more compassionate than machine ever will be? but good job,mimoz.

It's very mysterious I like it.

what year is it? I MUST KNOW.

What year is it? Look a little deeper my friend.
Believe what you think it is, no answer is wrong.

I say its 9457054763452342351. right? ;D

Haha Ac! You decide after you read this.

Monday
May 14
12:30pm
Jackson’s Government Firm

The place was busy with workers, young and old, all minding their business. But something was in the back of their minds. Something big, unusual.
The president was coming.
Today was not the day to be wrong or not looking like you have something important to do. You could get your a$$ fired. The chief executive walked into the announcement room and spoke with a well firm tone into the microphone, “Today the president will be giving us a little visit. I expect everyone to be on their best behavior if you want your jobs. Assist him if you can but do not awe over him; it makes you look pathetic. That is all.”
“Excuse me sir, the president has arrived.” said the secretary
“Very well.”
They both walked out and went to the front door. There were the firm’s security guards plus the president’s guards. A beat up car was at the curb. The president’s guards opened the door and out walked the president. He had a formal suit on and his hair seemed freshly cut. The suit showed of his good shape that he kept himself in. His green eyes look toward the chief as and nodded his head. The chief nodded back, a signal of hello. His lips pursed and he strutted towards the open door.

He was not happy.



I bid my mother goodbye as I go downstairs. I grab a piece of toast and my book bag. I stuff the toast in my mouth and rummage in book bag pockets for my music player. I pull out a rectangle device and I lay it in my palm and take my forefinger and thumb and flick it. It automatically turns on and says my name. I request it to shift so it can fit my ears. It does so and I fit it over my ears like headphones. It adjusts to my head size so it won’t fall off. I put my book bag over my back and walk outside. I grab by skateboard and step on it to turn it on. It says my name and asks if I want directions to where I’m going. I say no and step on it again to ride it. Today seems like Beatles kind of day so I request my music player to play Beatles. Any song I add. It picks the Yellow Submarine. I start riding down the street from house, passing other houses and cars. Everyone seems in a rush. Good thing the government installed a safety zone for people who are not using cars.

In a town where I was born

Lived a man who sailed the sea

And he told us of his life

In the land of submarines

So we sailed into the sun

‘Till we found a sea of green

And we lived beneath the waves

In our yellow submarine

Hmm hmm hmm hmmmm……

I'd say this is really great. It seems to be something like, year 2030 or so.
I mean, on 2012 we will be able to go to a space hotel which is worth 3,500,000 million dollars, but I'm not going 'cause it doesn't include breakfast.
Anyways, my point is that it wouldn't weird if it was 2020 either...
But, it's still brilliant and well written. Congrats

I'm giving everybody a task.

What do find about this story so far that is unusual? Is there something that you don't see here that is written in most books?
Write down your explanation

I have decided that I will put parts that have been unedited and what not on here. Then I will make a final story on the forum titled
"Everlasting Lies Final". It will be edited, revised, and all that jazz.

thanksss